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  • 02-04-2007 1:55pm
    #1
    will_me
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9 ✭


    An ocean lies between a one and a two,
    Between an everyday I and you.
    Twenty thousand or so, the bottom
    Countless, deep.

    Of love, I am an unfamiliar
    Or a too familiar-

    A gorge between a me and you.
    Each time i wait, my heart stops
    As a certainty drops, as it falls
    All I hear imitated, echoed calls.

    I share my fears and dreams-
    To be you, with you

    I want to, I leap,
    Angel do I fall.


Comments

  • #2
    BEAT
    Hosted Moderators Posts: 5,945 ✭✭✭BEAT


    lovley.


  • #3
    queen v
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2 ✭queen v


    For who?


  • #4
    shiv
    Closed Accounts Posts: 408 ✭✭shiv


    First two lines pull you in and set up the rhythm.
    Don't think you need the 'a' before 'too familiar.'
    Third last stanza needs some tweaking me thinks, something is a bit awkward or off in it...
    Overall a lovely piece. Something wonderfully sad and resigned about it.
    I welcome your posts very much :)


  • #5
    will_me
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9 ✭will_me


    shiv wrote:
    First two lines pull you in and set up the rhythm.
    Don't think you need the 'a' before 'too familiar.'
    Third last stanza needs some tweaking me thinks, something is a bit awkward or off in it...
    Overall a lovely piece. Something wonderfully sad and resigned about it.
    I welcome your posts very much :)

    Cheers Shiv,
    i agree with your tweaking comment..that stanza irritates me- pompous and silly would be my description of it..it is certainly awkward. I was tempted to get rid of it all together bar the first line.
    I'm happy to leave the "a" in before "too familiar"...

    Thanks for the comments anyhow, glad you picked up on something that already bothered me.


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