just some lyrics

Amorphous Head

A day of rest.

Pyramids rise to block his view
Please, stop growing
he cant breath around you
he is crumbling under the pressure

he walked so far, accross beaches, through towns and to no avail
YOu expand while he contracts, one conciousness to conquer them all.
he thinks he is just happy, he is not dumb...how dare you?
Why dont you just shoot yourself, he is better without you!


lost in the sand
Lost in the sand
Reaching for the next step
climb, climb, climb...climb


They are never ending, I think i am done.
The tower in the distance, the door of the past.
I will always be with him, unlike you.
Betrayer of men, portrayer of all that is evil.


Sand covers us now, at least we are together.
Drowned in our own desire.umm
he was having fun, you were always jealous of his desire.
Just come down, dismount yourself, just look for a moment now.
See your destruction of him,
YOu crushed his spirit, giving him false thoughts,
He thought we all existed for a reason, now he thinks he is dumb.

Just a hand and no thoughts, a shadow of a genius.
At least give him the answer he searched so long for.

he knows the answer, he had it all along.
His will pushed him away, he held the answer.
Now, the burden is yours, to unvail to all,
The one thing he wanted you took.


anyway
please comment
positive and negative criticism welcome

It wasn't me!

Sounds something like what Incubus might have done around the S.C.I.E.N.C.E era. That's probably a compliment by the way, as I love that album.

Amorphous Head

It wasn't me! wrote:

. That's probably a compliment by the way, as I love that album.

thanks

i dont listen to incubus though

estebancambias

Very good, I can never write stuff like that, my songs are so obvious, like some blink 182 wannabe.

It wasn't me!

Amorphous Head wrote:

thanks

i dont listen to incubus though

Wasn't insinuating that you plagiarised your style or anything, don't worry.

Neurojazz

ok, who is 'he' in the first and thrid person instances...

The lyrics fade in and out of making sense to me... it's like your telling a story to yourself and missing out informing the listener half the facts... or is that the idea your'e trying to convay?

Steve_o

I agree, i got lost once or twice while reading it!! But other than that i like it!

pq0n1ct4ve8zf5

generally I liked it, apart from the second section. "one conciousness to conquer them all." that makes me start thinking about lord of the rings

I really love the line below
"He thought we all existed for a reason, now he thinks he is dumb."

Amorphous Head

thanks for the complements

i had a feeling it would be lost on most
it HEAVILY influenced by tool hence the ummm..."getting lost" and im pobably telling the story to myself so it makes sence to me

estebancambias wrote:

Very good, I can never write stuff like that, my songs are so obvious, like some blink 182 wannabe.

i have thosands of them

Amorphous Head

by hte way this isnt my work
its my mate daves
he's really shy and personal bout his work and i wanted to prove to him that he's a brilliant songwrter but he found the post and id like to give him credit for it

Frankiestylee

I don't really like it to be honest... I can't see how it's sung. Does he have any mp3s of it up or anything? I can see it possibly be good, but at the moment it just strikes me as a bit unbalanced between being cryptic and being obvious, kinda like a mix of styles but not really achieving a nice fusion. If it's influenced by Tool then I could let it away with a bit more since the intended singing might use certain complexities that are lost in type and without knowing how it's sung it just feels a bit akward on the tongue.