Martha, Queen of Montreal (opinions appreciated)

Driver 8

Born too late to hesitate
Robyn echoed in her ears
“You’d best stand with the upper hand,
By the time the smoke has cleared”

Words subside, but still reside
Shadowy, seductive refrain
“Goals to fulfil, blood to spill…
But Martha you’ll remain”

Born in debt to desire
Never to be repaid
Entwined in her seduction
The foundations had been laid

She’ll go too far
Though it won't deter
Martha bloodies the stars
For shining brighter than her

Her friends, she’ll slay
For forsaking her lies
She’ll blacken the day
For illuminating the void within her eyes

Her dress slides, your whole world disjoints
Martha’s ****ed lesser men, just to prove a point
Smell of fine wine, you’ll swear you’re in control
On principle, Martha’s stolen men’s very souls

“Sweetheart, you can have it all
Sweetheart, I can’t fall”

Struggle not in contemplation
Proceed direct to resignation
A second’s hesitation
Her silvery hair’s your destination

The world is contingent, its law sure and stringent
But between her thighs, her emerald eyes
Lies a baleful gulf

“Sweetheart, I can’t fall
I’m the Queen of Mon-tre-al
Sweetheart, I can’t fall
I’m the Queen of Mon-tre-al”
Martha will pry from you all trust
In her fingers, turned to dust
Martha will take all about you that’s good
Chew on every sinew, drink every drop of blood

“Sweetheart, I can’t fall
I’m the Queen of Mon-tre-al
I’m the Queen of Mon-tre-al”

Steve_o

Thats excellent, reads more like a powerful poem, which is a great thing!! Very good stuff man, keep it up!