A song to disect

G-izzles

Alright, I've been righting songs for a good three or so years now. I mainly do concept stuff. I have two big bunches of songs that form a big story line that are nearly finished as separate albums but lately I've started doing songs that stand out on their own now. This is one of them. Tell me what you think

When The World Sends Me In

We ran fast into the dead of the night
Like hungry kids at the promise of a Turkish Delight
I’d like to say I wasn’t foaming at the mouth
But the will of the world sent me in, sent me out

The car couldn’t stop, the brakes were too worn
It tore after us, faster and faster (and faster and faster…)
There were no trees to make it stop and we were
Too absent minded and scared to just veer off its course

The ground levelled out and the car slowed down
We were all panting and some started giving out
Saying where are we now? This isn’t were I want to be
But the will of the world sends us in, sends us out makes us be

I took a walk and leaned on a tree
Like a satellite I looked at the group as they
Argued and fought over where to go now
But the question is how we allowed…

Ourselves to go off course, and be led astray
We let others lead our way
Now the cat’s eyes are watching me
As I veer off of the road and throw the map away

I ran fast into the light of a dream
Like a starving animal, eyes filled with fire!
No car in hell could stop me on this road
When the world sends me in it’s to where I want to go
When the world sends me in it’s to where I want to go
When the world sends me in it’s to where I want to go

humberklog

What's it doing musically? What instrument did you write it on?

It's very good.

What with your introduction to it I'd a funny picture of you in mt head wearing a cape and space hoppers like Rick Wakeman.





P.S There are a lot of people that put something up for a bit of C and C yet don't afford their own thoughts on others work. I've noticed that if you give a bit out then others will respond more to yours.

P.P.S The imagery of hungry kids being promised Turkish Delight is a picture of disappointed kids. "We want sweets...oh feck'n hell...it's bloody Turkish Delight!...Balls".

G-izzles

Haha, good point on the kids, but if you've ever read anything by Roald Dahl, I'm pretty sure kids craved the old Delight back in the day!

Musically, the song's at mid to fast tempo. Like the Automatic's "Steve McQueen" or something along those lines. Billy Talent-esque. To be honest, I try not to bo genre-limited but just to give you an idea. It's not punk either, more of a proggy, Coheed and Cambria style rock vibe. But again, not gonna limit myself to any genre's. Bit of an overly-long answer there!

And I appreciate what you say about give and take with the C&C too. I have responded to a few on here but I tend to give long reply's (as you can see) so I don't always have the time! Lousy excuse though. I'll be more active in here anyway, got hours to kill in work!