Whaddya Think :)?

reap-a-rat

Hey all!

Just wrote a quick poem there in the last few mins, obviously needs work and that but would like yer opinions! Would also like people to try and guess what was going through my head as I wrote:D!

<No Name>

And as I sit on top of China I notice the little things.
Venus stares at me, a reminder of the day all Fusion crumbled.
The brushes are odd now, only three survive
and they look for cover, of which there is much.
Not even this is age defying.
The cotton is neat now, untouched, not needed;
Fruity scents escape like I cannot.
French water smells like a spinster.
The tiles that time forgot
refuse to age in vein; yet, step back to a time
when man was there, he reigned.
Now the only rain is from a hose
and it tries to wash away the pain;
The pain which it only knows.

Black Heart

Interesting poem. Has someone left you? Moved out of home? I get that from the words, but I'm probably way off.

reap-a-rat

Black Heart wrote: »

Interesting poem. Has someone left you? Moved out of home? I get that from the words, but I'm probably way off.

Thats dead on! Its actually about sitting in the bathroom and noticing that a man's touch in there is missing, the 'cover' i write of is make up, the scents are of perfume rather than cologne, the towels are neat because the man isnt messing them up! Its about my father leaving the house really!

Black Heart

I like it, it's a nice poem. I had the feeling that the cotton referred to a man, but I was puzzled by the reference to brushes. Are they shaving brushes? Paint brushes? Sorry, my curiosity has been piqued.

I must be stupid, they're shaving brushes, right? Not many men leave their paint brushes in the bathroom.

reap-a-rat

Black Heart wrote: »

I like it, it's a nice poem. I had the feeling that the cotton referred to a man, but I was puzzled by the reference to brushes. Are they shaving brushes? Paint brushes? Sorry, my curiosity has been piqued.

I must be stupid, they're shaving brushes, right? Not many men leave their paint brushes in the bathroom.

Actually, the brushes are tooth brushes:)!

Black Heart

:eek: Yeah, I don't know what I was thinking there. :pac: