What's the correct grammar?

im...LOST

I'm sorry guys, but it's something that I'm not sure about and there is no one around that I can ask...

I'm doing a draft for an advert.
(There is a picture of Tony and some text beside it.)

Tony, here, is a member of the community board.
or
Tony here is a member of the community board.


I'm just not sure (if either) is correct and I'd like some feedback if ye can.
Please and thanks!

Eliot Rosewater

I'd say the first, but I've no reason to back it up beyond instinct. Even better, "Tony, pictured here, is a member of the community board."

Kinski

I'd revise Rosewater's suggestion slighty: "Tony, pictured, is a member of the community board." So long as there are no pictures of anyone else, that should be enough.

Just don't go with "Tony, here is a member of the community board." :P

Edit: Actually, on second thoughts, since this is an ad, maybe you want the text to sound informal? If that's your intention, then you should use the original phrase with no commas, as that reflects the way in which the phrase would be spoken - without pause.

spanx

How about just "Tony is a member of the community board".
If Tony is the only one pictured, people will probably guess that it's him.

Bearhunter

On the grammar point, the second one is correct, although it would be easier to simply say "Tony, left/right, is...."

Plowman

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Kinski

Bearhunter wrote: »

On the grammar point, the second one is correct, although it would be easier to simply say "Tony, left/right, is...."

The OP may intend it to sound conversational. "Tony, left,..." and "Tony, pictured..." read like journalistic copy.

EnglishLit

Go with the sentence without commas or changes if you want it to be conversational, fun or informal...like the way the Emobile ads are for example.

If you want to be formal and serious, put in the "Tony, pictured left, ...'

JaneHudson

I'd go with the second one because you get to keep the conversational style and nobody would think that Tony was being introduced to a member of the community board.

Miss Fluff

I'd take out the 'here" and just have it read:

Tony is a member of the community board

Permabear

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Nolanger

Tony (above) is a member of the community board.

ThePinkCage

Going with how it sounds in your head is often a good guide. Think I'd drop the here, or choose the sentence with no commas.

CaoimH_in

With commas is the correct grammar.

lordgoat

Tony here, is a member...

tricky D

AdSpeak doesn't require the use of perfect grammar. Punctuation is often dropped. The simple "Tony is a member of the community board" is the best copy.