Grammar Check

niaroh1x96

Hey,
just wondering if anyone here would be able to tell me if the following two passages are grammatically correct and if the translations are ok. Thanks, they too sample answers for my junior cert.

Go raibh míle maith agat!

1.

(i) Rinne mé staidéar ar Dúnmharú ar an Dart le Ruaidhrí O’ Baílle i rith mo chúrsa. Feicimid an t-ábhar ‘grá’ san úrscéal seo.

(ii )Taispeántar an téama ‘grá’ go soléir ó thús an úrscéal. Tá grá le feicéail idir an príomhcarachtéir Niall, agus a bhean Máire.
Ar an gcéad dul síos, i dtosach an scéal, feicimid an grá atá ag Máire do Niall. Is duine grámhar í Máire – cé go bhfuil sí cinnte go bhfuil a fear céile ag dul as a mheabhair nuair a thosaíonn sé ag pacáil chun dul chuig an Ghréig, aontaíonn sí chun dul leis ar aon nós. Áfach, mothaíonn sí buartha faoi a fear dil agus teastaíonn uaithi cabhrú dochtúir a fháil. Tá a croí istigh ann. Go mífhortúnach, íocfaidh sí go daor as a grá - lena saol féin.
Ina theannta sin, tá neart grá ag Niall dá bhean freisin. Ar an drochuair, an am a feiceann muid é seo is soiléire sa leabhar ná an uair a faigheann sí bás. Nuair a sroicheann sé ar ais ó Zurich, agus nuair a feiceann sé Máire ina luí ar an urlár, marbh, tá a chroí briste. Tosaíonn sé ag caoineadh, luíonn sé in aice léi agus tógann sé a lámh ina lámh. Feictear a ghrá di sa nóiméad brónach, rómánsach seo. Ar ndóigh, tagann an taispeántas grá seo i bhfad ró-dhéanach.
Nuair a chuireann muid na pointí thuas le chéile, tá sé éasca dúinn chun an téama ‘grá’ a fheicéail . Is léir go bhfuil téama tábhachtach é sa leabhar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.

English translation:
(i) I studied ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’ by Ruaidhrí O’ Baílle during my course. We see the subject of love in this novel.

(ii)The theme of love is shown clearly from the start of this novel. There is love to be seen between the main character Niall, and his wife Máire.
Firstly, at the start of the story, we see the love that Máire has for Niall. Máire is a loving person – even though she thinks that her husband is gone crazy/out of his mind when he starts packing to go to Greece, she agrees to go with him anyway. However, she does feel worried about her beloved husband and wants to get doctor’s help for him. She cares for him very much. Unfortunately, she will pay dearly for her love for him - with her own life.
Also, Niall loves his wife very much too. Unfortunately, the time we see this most clearly is the hour of her death. When he returns from Zurich and sees Máire lying in the floor dead, his heart is broken. He starts to cry, lies on the floor beside her and takes her hand in his. His love for her is to be seen in this sad, romantic moment. Of course, this display of love comes much too late.
When we put the above points together, it’s easy for us to see the theme of love. It’s clear that love is an important theme in the book ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.

2.


Bás – Death

(i) Rinne me staidéar ar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’ le Ruaidhrí O’ Baílle i rith mo chúrsa. Feicimid an t-ábhar ‘ bás’ san úrscéal seo.

(ii) Feictear ‘Bás’ ó thus go deireadh an scéal. Is téama athfhilleadh é sa leabhar.
I dtús báire, i dtosach an scéal, tarlaíonn bás Gerrit ar an Dart. Suíonn sé in aice le Niall agus ceapann Niall go bhfuil sé ina chodladh. Áfach, nuair a thiteann sé ar an dtalamh, is léir go bhfuil an fear bocht marbh! Faigheann muid amach níos déanaí sa scéal gur mharigh a dheartháir, Jan, é. Is eachtra tábhachtach é – tosaíonn an bás seo na eachtraí a athraíodh saol Niall go deo.
Ansin, tagann bás Máire. Maraítear í go brúdiúil ar mhaithe le hairgead Jan. Tagann Niall ar ais ó Zurich go dtí an óstán agus níor creideann sé a shúile nuair a feiceann sé a bhean ina luí ar an urlár, a dhá láimh sínte amach taobh léi is a cuid gruaige fliuch lena fuil. D’íoc Máire go daor as a dílseacht do Niall, d’íoc sí lena beatha féin.
Is é an bás deireanach ná bás Jan. Maraíonn Miriam é ag an ionad dumpála. Ag an am sin, bhí Jan ar tí Niall a mharú – cúpla soicind eile agus bheadh Niall marbh freisin. Níl splanc trua ag an léitheoir do Jan nuair a maraítear é mar ba drochfear ceart é. Is é an t-aon bás san úrscéal a chuireann áthas orainn.
Tá sé soléir go bhfuil téama tábhachtach é ‘Bás’ agus is é ceann amháin de na príomhtéamaí sa leabhar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.

English Translation:
(i) I studied ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’ by Ruaidhrí O’ Baílle during my course. We see the subject of ‘death’ in this novel.
(ii) The theme of ‘death is seen from the start to the end of the story. It is a recurring theme in the book.
First of all, at the beginnning of the story, Gerrit’s death happens on the Dart. He sits next to Niall and Niall thinks that he is asleep. However, when he falls on the ground, it’s clear that the poor man is dead! We find out later in the story that his brother, Jan, killed him. This is an important event – this death begins the events that would change Niall’s life forever.
Then comes Máire’s death. She is killed brutally for the sake of Jan’s money. Niall comes back from Zurich to the hotel and he doesn’t believe his eyes when he sees his wife lying on the floor, her two hands stretched out beside her and her hair wet with her blood. Máire paid dearly for her love for Niall, she paid with her own life.
The last death in the story is Jan’s death. Miriam kills him at the dump. At that time, Jan had been about to kill Niall – another couple of seconds and Niall would have been dead too. The reader has not a bit of pity for Jan when he is killed because he was a bad man through and through. It is the one death in the novel that pleases us.
It’s clear that death is an important theme and is one of the main themes in the book ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.

niaroh1x96

Can anyone help me please? Just wondering if you can find any bad grammar mistakes etc.

I would be very grateful as I need it before I go back to school

Thanks again

Micilin Muc

1.

(i) Rinne mé staidéar ar Dhúnmharú ar an Dart le ...

(ii )Taispeántar an téama ‘grá’ go soléir ó thús an úrscéil. Tá grá le feicéail idir an príomhcarachtar Niall, agus a bhean Máire.
Ar an gcéad dul síos, i dtosach an scéil, feicimid an grá atá ag Máire do Niall. ... chun dul chuig an nGréig, aontaíonn sí chun dul leis ar aon nós. Áfach, mothaíonn sí buartha faoina fear dil agus teastaíonn uaithi cabhrú chun dochtúir a fháil. Tá a croí istigh ann. Ar an drochuair, íocfaidh sí go daor as a grá - lena saol féin.
... an t-am is soiléire a fheicimid é seo sa leabhar ná an uair a faigheann sí bás. Nuair a thagann sé ar ais ó Zurich, agus nuair a fheiceann sé Máire ina luí ar an urlár, marbh, tá a chroí briste. ...

Ar ndóigh, tagann an taispeántas grá seo i bhfad ródhéanach.

Nuair a chuirimid na pointí thuas le chéile, tá sé éasca dúinn an téama ‘grá’ a fheicéail . Is léir gur téama tábhachtach é sa leabhar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.


Bás – Death

(i) Rinne me staidéar ar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’ le Ruaidhrí O’ Baílle i rith mo chúrsa. Feicimid an t-ábhar ‘ bás’ san úrscéal seo.

(ii) Feictear ‘Bás’ ó thus go deireadh an scéil. Is téama é a thagann aníos arís agus arís sa leabhar.
I dtús báire, i dtosach an scéil, tarlaíonn bás Gerrit ar an Dart. Suíonn sé in aice le Niall agus ceapann Niall go bhfuil sé ina chodladh. Áfach, nuair a thiteann sé ar an talamh, is léir go bhfuil an fear bocht marbh! Faighimid amach níos déanaí sa scéal gur mharaigh a dheartháir, Jan, é. Is eachtra tábhachtach é – tosaíonn an bás seo na heachtraí a athróidh saol Niall go deo.
Ansin, tagann bás Máire. Maraítear í go brúdiúil ar mhaithe le hairgead Jan. Tagann Niall ar ais ó Zurich go dtí an óstán agus ní chreideann sé a shúile nuair a fheiceann sé a bhean ina luí ar an urlár, a dhá láimh sínte amach taobh léi is a cuid gruaige fliuch lena fuil. D’íoc Máire go daor as a dílseacht do Niall, d’íoc sí lena beatha féin.
Is é an bás deireanach ná bás Jan. Maraíonn Miriam é ag an ionad dumpála. Ag an am sin, bhí Jan ar tí Niall a mharú – cúpla soicind eile agus bheadh Niall marbh freisin. Níl splanc trua ag an léitheoir do Jan nuair a mharaítear é mar ba dhrochfear ceart é. Is é an t-aon bás san úrscéal a chuireann áthas orainn.
Tá sé soléir gur téama tábhachtach é ‘Bás’ agus is é ceann amháin de na príomhthéamaí sa leabhar ‘Dúnmharú ar an Dart’.






Bold = basic grammar/spelling
Italics = grammar standardized from dialect

dory

And it's spelled: soiléir

dubhthach

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polar123

can any one help me i lost my notes on niall and his life in school!!!!!!!

Insect Overlord

polar123 wrote: »

can any one help me i lost my notes on niall and his life in school!!!!!!!

Read the story and write your own notes. It's a very short book!

polar123

Insect Overlord wrote: »

Read the story and write your own notes. It's a very short book!

i know but i am crap at irish and i spent ages on the notes and i cant find them :(

FWVT

Jesus does no-one do their own homework anymore now that there's internet? Wish I had this in my day.