unholy prayer

steve_kav

Posted this in athiesm a long time ago and was heavily criticised that it belongs in the christianity forum. Was very busy but i've finally found time for boards again so here it is.

Unholy prayer

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

I have no faith in God above
No success when it comes to love
Then why pray, oh lord, to thee?
You have no interest in me!

So many times Ive called to you
When the world around me all turns blue
You ignored me when my mam was dying
So in effect is the bible lying?

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

Where were you when I was broken?
When all I had was a silent token
A so-called sacred book of prayer
Which did nothing for me but just lie there

You never utter a word to me
As I kneel, call, beg and plea
You watched my life fall apart
And left me no choice but to depart

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

We brought my girl here on our own
And not a bit of help from you was shown
My life now lies all tattered and torn
Was this the purpose for which I was born?

You lay down commandments like solid walls
When really its just a kick in the balls
Were made to suffer every day
And now my faith has rotted away

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

When we meet well have a chat
And discuss your reasons for being a prat
Youve done nothing for us you son of a bitch
So why not resign and give up your pitch?

You allow horror, cruelty and loss of life
While its us who suffer the pain and strife
Youre a sick mother****er who cares not for us
Please hire someone else who actually does

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

So Im to live in fear of you?
Thats just **** - my point of view
You let **** happen to the world at large
Yet were to sit by while youre in charge?

Take on board the points Ive made
Youve ignored the prayers Ive said
You simply watch from up on high
But be warned faiths end is nigh

If I die before I wake
My souls not yours, o lord, to take
If I die while Im asleep
O lord your distance I hope youll keep

Steven Kavanagh

What do people think of this poem?

PDN

What do people think of your poem? I think you ought to read the Forum Charter before posting here again. There is an Atheist/Christian debate thread, and you might want to read the clauses in the Charter as regards swearing.