Critique my song

Chazz Michael Michaels

Hello folks,

I have a song I would like people to cast their ear over, it's just an instrumental recording on Ableton, but the arrangement is final and I do have lyrics that I have to get off my arse and record. Anyway, you can find it here:

http://breakingtunes.com/algernonwilde

oceanmachine

Hey Chazz,

Great name! Sounds good and really well recorded. Get on the vocals!

Joshua J

Hey man nice production quality, feels kinda dreamy and light at start then a bit more energetic and tense.

Am picturing a guy driving around a city at night (going by the title) looking for someone. Getting into conflict during the upbeat parts, like fighting her pimps or something lol. And then at the end the two of them driving away with her sleeping on his shoulder. Just the picture that came to mind. Anyway nice work.

orchidsrpretty

Don't know much about music arrangements etc, but I really enjoyed listening to that song, nice with or without lyrics. Good work!

Chazz Michael Michaels

Joshua J wrote: »

Hey man nice production quality, feels kinda dreamy and light at start then a bit more energetic and tense.

Am picturing a guy driving around a city at night (going by the title) looking for someone. Getting into conflict during the upbeat parts, like fighting her pimps or something lol. And then at the end the two of them driving away with her sleeping on his shoulder. Just the picture that came to mind. Anyway nice work.

hehehe, that cracked me up!

City of Lights is referenced in the lyrics in the last section before the verse returns:

Your eyes are a City of Light,
Your eyes disarm me,
Your eyes are a City of Light,
Your eyes

Anyway, I will try get on with recording vocals. Thanks!

whiteonblu

Chazz Michael Michaels wrote: »

Hello folks,

I have a song I would like people to cast their ear over, it's just an instrumental recording on Ableton, but the arrangement is final and I do have lyrics that I have to get off my arse and record. Anyway, you can find it here:

http://breakingtunes.com/algernonwilde

link will not open for me

Chazz Michael Michaels

whiteonblu wrote: »

link will not open for me

Works for me. I dunno.

Try through Google?

https://www.google.ie/#hl=ga&safe=off&q=algernonwilde&oq=algernonwilde&gs_l=serp.3...23531.24735.0.24942.0.0.0.0.0.0.0.0..0.0...0.0...1c.stl5kZEzZmU&bav=on.2,or.r_gc.r_pw.&fp=7ebeda1e905ebcd&biw=1639&bih=771

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Joshua J wrote: »

Hey man nice production quality, feels kinda dreamy and light at start then a bit more energetic and tense.

Am picturing a guy driving around a city at night (going by the title) looking for someone. Getting into conflict during the upbeat parts, like fighting her pimps or something lol. And then at the end the two of them driving away with her sleeping on his shoulder. Just the picture that came to mind. Anyway nice work.

I hope the protagonist of your febrile imagination is fighting and not 'haggling'.
For in the 'denouement' we see him driving away to an unstated destination with, presumably 'a lady of the night', sleeping on his shoulder. One is tempted to ask whether this happens before or after 'the contract is executed', so to speak, hopefully the latter, for if the former then he's a lousy conversationalist.

By the way, 'Pimps' plural for one client is new to me.
Are there now too many pimps for a dwindling client base of 'streetwalkers'?
Just what the hell's going on out there in the 'City of Lights'?
Should I 'get out' more?