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my first step

  • 02-09-2015 10:47pm
    #1
    happyholly
    Registered Users Posts: 17 ✭


    hi this is my first attempt at writing, advice welcomed

    she moves at the speed of light
    one day shes gonna get alright
    when that day comes I'm getting outta here
    whats the difference between love and fear.

    be ready, her time will come
    wont be much left when shes done
    get to start it all over again
    I cant wait for now to be then.

    i wasn't born, ready for this
    all starts off from a single kiss
    then kiss goodbye, and its all over
    I think I know now, what really drove her.


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  • #2
    heathledgerlove
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 114 ✭✭heathledgerlove


    Reads like song lyrics. Nice rhythm! Looks like 3 stanzas / verses
    It's about the breakdown of a relationship, is it? I like how both the people - the speaker, and the lover? (she) both are dynamic characters in the snapshot.

    I think it has great energy, reminds me of a car driving for some reason, racing away.


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